My fan fiction is based on the movie Ninja Assassin. It follows Raizo and the events that occur after the movie finishes.
As I climb these walls, the burden of the Ozunu clan dissipates into the ashes of the burned village I used to call home. As I reach the top of these walls, a feeling of content courses through my veins. Kiriko. My eyes can finally see the true beauty behind these walls.
The beauty of freedom.
As I look into the distance behind these walls that once confined me, memories of the past swarm my thoughts.
Ozunu. Family. Brotherhood. Pride. Honour.
Words that used to have meaning. Words that used to have substance. On top of these walls, I have taken my first breath of freedom to relinquish all grip that you had over me...
Ozunu...
I was orphaned as a child. You took me in with open arms. You raised me. You taught me life lessons. You were a father to me and in return I was a son to you. Even through the blistering training, the torture, the cuts and bruises, the pain was more bearable than the thought of failing you.
Family... Brotherhood...
We were your children. We were seeds of destruction, slowly blooming into weapons of assassination. You nurtured us in a way no normal child would have ever been raised. A family I had called my own. Brothers and sisters I had grown up with and endured pain with. You brainwashed us, you took our youth and fed us with your venomous lies. Something I could never forgive you for.
Pride... Honour...
Everything you taught me. Everything I believed in. You took that away from me. You took Kiriko away from me. What pride was there taking the life of one you call your own daughter? Was there any honour in your actions? Did you gain satisfaction? Taking your life, ending your corruption, this made me understand what true honour is.
With your blood on my blade... I have rid the world of your torment. I have destroyed Ozunu.
It's clearly unfinished at the moment, but I'm planning to add dialogue later. Thanks for reading!
ReplyDeletehey, nice story, it makes me wna watch the movie cuz i'm so curious 2 find out wats going on..
ReplyDeleteit looked kinda finished to me...lol
i think it's a good piece even if you leave it this way.. but as you said, you were gona add dialogue into it, i thought it will change the whole style. because i thought this piece now is really like a descriptive story with no detail but yet conveyed a complete story. If however you were to add dialogue into it, it will become a really narrative story with feelings and emotions. whichever way you choose i look forward 2 reading the final!
Thanks for the feedback. Yeah the thing is it's pretty hard to hit the 800-1000 words without adding dialogue. I don't know how the really expand it further from this point without adding dialogue lol. I'll post up dialogue version soon, then tell me what you think ! Thanks again :)
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